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Liner Notes
chickadee [11/26/2006 8:22:35 AM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 2 stars
SP - So sorry I didn't take the time to critique this with more words. I will do that now.
The music is executed with some skill but lacks appeal for me because of its droning, march-type flavor. The vocal quality of the singer is pretty good but the lyrics are vague, boring and full of self pity. There is more depth and passion to your bruised comments to other critiques. Where was the wordsmithing when writing this? Don't be upset. Get some kisses and everything will be alright.
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/26/2006 3:23:50 AM EST]
Score: +0
awww... five boos from them ::topPricks::
about l'il ole me and my critiquing skillz
while they lapp their wounds on the way
back to their geekmafia endeavors (D&D?).

so sad and sorrowfull.

suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/25/2006 3:19:28 AM EST]
Score: +0
UNKLE- yeah, it's ugly when the truth is involved.
I ain't talking world domination or scientific cures
to humanity's cancers (you might think so based
on y'alls surprise to my laments). What I am talkin'
'bout is some kind of accepted response about
my concerns, being top critics' criticisms towards
the artists creaions on this site. Simple. Easy.
Fun for the whole Redfizz communi-tee!
unklesam [11/25/2006 2:53:43 AM EST]
Score: +0
ok! yeah that makes sense to me. I am saying you're not doing yourself any favors. It really looks ugly some of the #@&%!e you're saying.

If you only knew. I think you have a victim syndrome because I'm definitely not a PC nerd even though I play one in real life.

I lived without TV and a Phone for 2 years and a car for one.
I read a lot and go out in nature as often as possible.
I think that you however are pretty 1 dimensional. Good job if that's what you're going for.

I guess hate on the net is pretty boring.

Do me a favor and at least rip on my songs or something? Your attacks really have no foundation here
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/25/2006 2:30:26 AM EST]
Score: +0
well The Cue says all your geekmaniacal fantasy
references still don't add up to shi-ite. All this cyber
geek talk is really a downer and in itself quite pathetic.
The repressed (oppressed - is your Mom still doing
your laundry?) nature y'all exibit with your immature
scrotum and blow job talk point to the real reason
there is no useful substance in your statements.
unklesam [11/25/2006 2:17:41 AM EST]
Score: +0
yoda says your music sucks man. who am I to question
even spock says you need a good blowjob

maybe ...just get out the vaseline and feel good.
Then you could be a good critic as well
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/25/2006 1:40:58 AM EST]
Score: +0
brilliant + critic = oxymoron

...especially these ::topPricks:: here on Redfizz.
There is no need to follow. Following is a fine art for
the herd, or in this case, the Star Wars nerd. Quoting
Obi Wan will not drive your point home nor will it even
add an ounce of inspiration. It just continues to prove
my point that you ::topPricks:: would rather make
repeated attempts at using geek-esque witticisms
than providing useful and worthy critiques for us
lowly musicians to apply to our creations, be they
harsh or favorful critiques.

No hate here IRREGULAR, soley an attampt at rousing
any semblance of intelligence from you ::topPricks::.
IrREGULAR ELEPHAnT [11/25/2006 1:21:43 AM EST]
Score: +0
Good for you. Use your anger luke. You don't know the power...
Try again. I guarantee you can do better.

SuckerPunch speaks of community. People in communities know each other.
It is an accepted norm in many types of pop music criticism for the critic to display his wit and literary brilliance without specific critical comment. The justification for this is that if you follow the brilliant critic you know where his point of view originates.
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/25/2006 12:53:52 AM EST]
Score: +0
I see the light hearted humor, but in this
situation, it is called backpeddling. I just want
it to be known that as artists looking to find an
online community that can provide legitimate
critiques (NOT ego stroking), we are after more
in depth and somewhat structured feedback
to our works. if that is too much to ask, if you
feel you have no time to give 'sucky' music
a criique of 'I just don't like this' then I feel
like I've been wasting my time amongst a
seemingly sincere group of people, and will
have to remove myslef from this site.. A lot
of you ::topPricks:: may welcome that idea,
mostly because I've challenged your geek
webnerd humor, but there are a few good ones
in the group, and a lot of other good critics
on this site with educated and eloquently
stated thoughts and sentances who I will
miss listening to their music and to their
critiques.

You sucker ::topPricks:: keep yer nuts
amongst yerselves, I'll keep writing and recording.
TheBuyer [11/25/2006 12:44:10 AM EST]
Score: +0
i...what?
IrREGULAR ELEPHAnT [11/25/2006 12:37:46 AM EST]
Score: +0
And did the three of you?
TheBuyer [11/25/2006 12:35:20 AM EST]
Score: +0
in kindygartey they said share. please share my nutses
IrREGULAR ELEPHAnT [11/25/2006 12:25:53 AM EST]
Score: +0
our? hmmm
TheBuyer [11/25/2006 12:17:14 AM EST]
Score: +0
that's our nutses!
IrREGULAR ELEPHAnT [11/25/2006 12:05:25 AM EST]
Score: +0
Why is there a fuzzy white scrotum in the top right corner of the fizz logo?
TheBuyer [11/24/2006 11:55:42 PM EST]
Score: +0
see what happnes? unk is functionally retarded and you broke him. feel good, big man?
unklesam [11/24/2006 11:39:26 PM EST]
Score: +0
go to your room sucky! If you keep up this retaliation I will be forced to 1/2 star more of your songs. I may even say some not nice things on your other tunes.

You are mean, and my feelings are slighty stung
beastia [11/24/2006 8:43:11 PM EST]
Score: +0
Right on suckerpunch..........you're right, this place is #@&%!ing cracked
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/24/2006 8:41:36 PM EST]
Score: +0
THEBUYER::topPrick:: - damn straight I got you pegged.

...on the contrary, you fired sucka! For failure to submit
a worthy critique (good or bad) on any of these Redfizz songs.

Get it right - don't be so dumb
TheBuyer [11/24/2006 7:53:15 PM EST]
Score: +0
wow, yes. you've got me pegged. i was wrong, you *are* a very funny fellow, right? dude. my original "#@&%!head" comment was meant to be taken as a term of endearment. i like some of your stuff, this happens to err on the crappy side of quality and i think it's dumb. Fair comment or not, i fired your ass.
singmetofire [11/24/2006 6:19:37 PM EST]
Score: +0
azz
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/24/2006 6:02:49 PM EST]
Score: +0
BUYER & UNKLEFOCKER- Again, you ::topPricks:: seem to want to rule the roost without getting your feathers ruffled. Now that someone questions your somewhat idiotic and short remarks, you feel the need to try and shut that voice down. I will not be shut down simply because a few computer geeks with too much free time who think they're so funny while being wrapped up in their own selfish proclivities decide they feel wronged by someone disagreeing with their methods. Half of this banter fuels my fight for true criticisms and the other half keeps me laughing my azz off. I have been very thankful to those who have voices their feedback, excuse me, INTELLIGENT feedback and have also asked for futher clarification based on their opinions. The fact that you have resorted to simple name calling and other ignorant statements continues to justify your limited capacity for educated feedback.
unklesam [11/24/2006 4:35:44 PM EST]
Score: +0
Well in saying this: I think I speak for all top pricks in saying that - we're doing this in our own time and at least acknowledging your music and taking the time to listen.

Itts no wonder some get pissed off when you dont even thank people for taking the time to listen and comment on your sorry ass.

I dont even think you're answering the questions posted back at you.

You suck, yes you definitely suck.
TheBuyer [11/24/2006 11:24:30 AM EST]
Score: +0
looks like we struck a nerve with you rather. i'm not sure exactly what it is that made your redfizz persona bitter but if you're going to be a jerk you should be funny. you're not funny you're pissy and humourless and it's distinctly unattractive. there's a fine line between caustic wit and just being a #@&%!ing idiot and you continue to redefine it. #@&%! you dude, you're fired. go post your #@&%!ty songs somewhere else if you don't like the way you're treated here.
Commander Yo [11/24/2006 11:22:16 AM EST]
Score: +0
Sucka'. My reference to dynamics was in reference to the Vocals. It seemed that the vocals were at one level too much.

A more liberal use of panio (quite) to forte (loud) with either sudden or gradual changes between them. Both TOOL (maynard) and U2 (Bono) use this to great effect.

Yo!
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/24/2006 10:54:19 AM EST]
Score: +0
have I struck a nerve with one a the ::topPricks::?
ScottT [11/24/2006 10:52:59 AM EST]
Score: +0
SP-I think you have gotten some decent constructive thoughts on your music. I do find it odd that you have an issue when someone says something posted "sucks" or is "intentionally gay" etc. and then call folks Top Pricks, saying people are making "snide childish references" and refering to some comments as "smarmy computer geek humor". Let's see-your comment on my song Snowdance was "wank it WANK IT". That was amazingly constructive. Who's being a prick?
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/24/2006 10:50:27 AM EST]
Score: +0
COMMANDER: got yer crtiques. Thanks fer them. Seems that when one artist steps outta line, alotta the ::topPricks:: like to jump in and join the retarded remark fest. Possibly I mistakend your name with one of THEM. Question for you; your fourth suggestion... dynamics as in your feel that in was over compressed? or dynamics in terms of any possible monotony? soy muy curioso...
Commander Yo [11/24/2006 10:36:18 AM EST]
Score: +0
Hey Sucka! Can't follow all this ranting between you and the fizzzzz folk,but I was NOT attempting to be....."cynical & sarcasti...what so ever!

I was actually trying to be constuctive for you and your band.

The fizzzz folk seem to hate my music, do I care? Yes, a little. But the reality is I LOVE making music it is my passion. So whatever these FIZZZZ guys say can't make me stop playing and striving to get better!

Yo!
ScottT [11/24/2006 8:48:25 AM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 1.5 stars
ScottT [11/24/2006 8:47:31 AM EST]
Score: +0
I think the production on this is pretty good. The music is fairly predictable. It doesn't move me at all. Nothing about it jumps out and say listen to this again.
IrREGULAR ELEPHAnT [11/24/2006 7:05:52 AM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 2 stars
Having cool sounding guitars and tight drums does not make a song interesting. Especially at this tempo. Lyrically, I'm feeling bored tonight.
Vocally, some keys don't exist for a reason. Harmonically challenged.
unklesam [11/24/2006 1:40:27 AM EST]
Score: +0
why you hate me in the face?
no really I have nothing against you and your style but you do come off a bit assenine. I think I'll check up on those Star Trek forums of mine
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/23/2006 10:57:19 PM EST]
Score: +0
UNKLEfocker - more unintelligent retort, as expected. Please keep the geek humor for your star trek buddies.
heyheysweetjesus [11/23/2006 9:15:28 PM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 0.5 stars
unklesam [11/23/2006 7:21:08 PM EST]
Score: +0
what are you bitching about anyway? I see you only have 10 comments and they're all about you. Shut up and walk the walk. I have yet to see anything worth reading critique wise
unklesam [11/23/2006 7:13:56 PM EST]
Score: +0
hate this you a focker
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/23/2006 4:13:46 PM EST]
Score: +0
so put that in your syringe and shoot it UNKLE!!!
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/23/2006 4:12:09 PM EST]
Score: +0
I'm so misunderstood, it's sickening. Vanity? Hardly. Fishing for compliments? Not on yer life. Simply looking for optimum critical feedback. I'll say it again, the following words help no one other than the vanity ridden ::topPrick:: saying it; 'sucks' 'hated it'' 'intentionally gay' and so on and so on (see ::topPrick:: critiques for more juicy tid bits).
unklesam [11/23/2006 3:49:40 PM EST]
Score: +0
oh I just meant (not well liked) gritty and Punk esque- much like suckerpunch

I still see mainstream bunk punk as an oxymoron
singmetofire [11/23/2006 3:14:25 PM EST]
Score: +0
Becuase you said Punk is baaaaaad.
That was a half hour ago though. Im over it.
unklesam [11/23/2006 3:05:10 PM EST]
Score: +0
Singme: why you have me man?
unklesam [11/23/2006 3:02:11 PM EST]
Score: +0
well I must say that I think you suffer from vanity. I think if you looked around you'd see that "critics" go around and rate songs. (DUhhhh)

Sometimes it doesnt grab you. What kind of feedback do you want exactly?

I was as surprised as you to see the (top Prick) by my name.It happens if you stay here long enough.
I would also say that this suffers from mediocrity. Sure its-glossy and ugly at the same time but it is just 4 chords and whiney. The lyrics are pretty pointless and I dont see what direction you're going in.

This is jock metal with a twist. I still gave you 3 stars.I think people do this in their spare time. And there's years and years of experience here. You should take the criticism with heed if you want to get better.

That's what you want right? Or you can go to myspace and get all the girls and your friends to tell you how great you are and that what you're doing is perfect.

singmetofire [11/23/2006 2:23:24 PM EST]
Score: +0
at the same time though i know where your coming from. It's really hard to take anything with a grain of salt when it feels like your being #@&%!piled on.
I guess im just tryin to help, i enjoy your posts, don't get discouraged.
singmetofire [11/23/2006 2:20:19 PM EST]
Score: +0
Well, your speaking as if we just run around hating on every song that comes in here. Just becuase some didn't like yours. Doesn't mean they post nonsensical bull#@&%! all over every song that comes down the pipes.

Hence me trying earlier to explain that everyone has Genre Prefrences, and sometimes they don't know enough about this style to give more of an explination than "i don't like it" BUT if there were a million "I DONT LIKE IT" posts on this site for every song someone hated, then it'd get a little retarded, wouldn't it?

At least people are getting creative. Like i said before, just take it as understanding that the person really just didn't dig the track, then take whatever posative feedback you have, and then get back to writin!
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/23/2006 2:19:38 PM EST]
Score: +0
COMMANDER - you're exactly right. I do like it or I wouldn't have created it. A point, I musta missed it... unless you count the cynical & sarcastic undertones you're attempting to create.
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/23/2006 2:14:40 PM EST]
Score: +0
THEBUYER::topPrick:: - gotta dolla?

UNCKLEham - what I strive for is constructive criticism instead of the smarmy computer geek humor I see all over these Redfizz pages. "Sucked," "I hate this" and "intentionally gay" are examples of rediculous remarks which really reflect on the Critic who made them and their lack of intelligence. Who keeps these :::topPricks::: in check? Seems as if I stayed up all night making snide childish references, then I could join the elitist club!
singmetofire [11/23/2006 1:18:23 PM EST]
Score: +0
i hate you for 10 minutes.
singmetofire [11/23/2006 1:18:17 PM EST]
Score: +0
ooooh unlke. You are a liar.

unklesam [11/23/2006 12:41:36 PM EST]
Score: +0
hey clearly you win the (top prick) title here Sucker
I think you're actually getting a lot of honest feedback.
what do you want?

PUNK music isnt good to start with
singmetofire [11/23/2006 12:33:14 PM EST]
Score: +0
hey there you go.
SP, i will say this. I've heard a lot of tracks by you on this site. And they are always great production quality. That's something to be said, that's something that a lot of people can't always do man. So what if your songs arent always an exact hit, but the quality always has been.
Commander Yo [11/23/2006 12:27:04 PM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 2.5 stars
A good tune that could be made much better by:
1)Shorten by at least a minute.
2) Bring the bridge in earlier.
3) fill in gaps in the guitar crunch with a black sabbath key sound
4) Use Dynamics Dynamics Dynamics on the voice.

Oh yeah who cares what anyone thinks about your music, you like it right?
singmetofire [11/23/2006 12:18:30 PM EST]
Score: +0
AHHH AARON, hahaha a nut nibble, LOL
aaronlife [11/23/2006 9:19:37 AM EST]
Score: +0
he wants a nut nibble
TheBuyer [11/23/2006 2:46:42 AM EST]
Score: +0
you're humourless. i said i heart you, what do you want, a blowjob and a nickel?
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/23/2006 1:36:38 AM EST]
Score: +0
well ya see I slapped a buncha reverb up there during the breakdown. I didn't want to over do it, but I guess I screwed that one up with the length of the song to begin with! I'm thinking most critics here didn't get past 2:30 (or 0:13 perhaps?). I'm sure TheBUYER::topPrick:: with have some precocious
remarks for me here... and I CAN'T WAIT to read them!!!
Mr. Bratty [11/23/2006 1:23:54 AM EST]
Score: +0
there again, using the length of the song as a canvas, you could paint some pretty trippy sonics up there with some effects. but that may be counter to what your goal is. i certainly don't claim to know. just throwin stuff out there. i do like this song, though.
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/23/2006 1:19:20 AM EST]
Score: +0
yeah, I gotcha

as a six minute song(!), I've forced myself to NOT shorten it
into a nicely packaged mp3 for dynamically deaf ears to
engage; rather I continue to break my arm with pats to
the back as its unpopular length is one of the fine qualities
I think it possesses. Guess I'll laugh to myself over the
years whilst I'm the ONLY one diggin' it!
Mr. Bratty [11/23/2006 1:12:17 AM EST]
Score: +0
i don't believe i've ever suggested that before. archives will tell either way. i think that in this tune, because of the long notes and repetition of lines in the verses and choruses, the blurriness could add the the total sonic landscape. the stops in the rhythm parts would break it up enough so it wouldn't just sound like a big echo chamber jesus and mary chain sort of thing. i'm not saying it would make or break the tune, i'm just saying my ear wants to hear that when i'm listening. plus, if you brought up the tempo a little, it would shorten the tune a little.
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/23/2006 12:49:14 AM EST]
Score: +0
Mr.Bratty: Have you suggested the Perry Farrell bounceback delay on my tunes before? It has been brought up a coupla times and I was wondering if you think it's a certain vocal quality that calls for it, or if it's simply to blur/soften any mistakes or harshnesses you're hearing?
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/23/2006 12:46:50 AM EST]
Score: +0
TheBUYER (top prick): I guess I was mistaken. I was thinking the website was a community related project made to help musicians get some feedback on their art, but I guess it was intended more as a bitch rag for bored virtual hedonists who feel like looking down on the fledglings and gracing them with a yea or nay every now and then. Pardon my unjust queries, oh noble one.
TheBuyer [11/22/2006 10:43:28 PM EST]
Score: +0
mostly i listen to songs no one else ever heard of, some of them are pretty good. other times i listen to songs no one should ever hear because they're terrible. then i read the news and post a link to articles once in a while. there's a common misconception that this is a musicians workshop of some kind but it's really just a website where you can get your songs heard by people who would never otherwise hear them.
Mr. Bratty [11/22/2006 10:34:44 PM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 3 stars
(abducted by aliens and returned but with missing time...?)
now that i've heard it, i guess my criticisms would be the same as some of the others. my suggestions would be up the tempo and the energy, and put some serious delay (a la perry farrell) on the vocals. take everything up a notch performance-wise. keep it tight, like it is, but a little more dangerous. it's a good song though, i think
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/22/2006 8:41:16 PM EST]
Score: +0
then what the #@&%! do you do here Buyer?
TheBuyer [11/22/2006 5:07:39 PM EST]
Score: +0
I don't "critique".
unklesam [11/22/2006 1:31:22 PM EST]
Score: +0
well I tell ya from my perspective, if you have 2 bands and 20 songs that either sound similar or generic, either low end metal/punk

it will definitely generate a lot of hmmmph so/so reviews.
Personally I think (yawn) when I hear something like this

it's a simple progression, some toolesque vocals
I'm not gonna rave about how good you are or how you suck.

it's just eh, you run out of things to say except that it sound like your other songs or rehashed or recycled.

Good production, the vox could be pushed up more, but if I saw you I would leave, as this just is another band with the same sound.

As far as diversifying, I leave that to you.
nopact [11/22/2006 1:18:37 PM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 0.5 stars
aaronlife [11/22/2006 12:58:56 PM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 3 stars
Mr. Bratty [11/22/2006 12:19:34 PM EST]
Score: +0
i think it is a noble thing you are doing SP. sedrite also suggested doing reviews without using comparisons. this is a good exercise as well. i heard this song in the battledrome. i can't remember if i gave it an up or down thumb. once i get the chance (when i'm not surrounded by sleeping females) i'll give it another listen and a subsequent review guaranteed to have two words or more.
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/22/2006 12:08:47 PM EST]
Score: +0
nah, not influenza

just tryin to make the world
a better place... one TOP CTITIC at a time!

thanks for your replies.
singmetofire [11/22/2006 11:59:11 AM EST]
Score: +0
in a battle = "Posted durring evaluation"
singmetofire [11/22/2006 11:58:45 AM EST]
Score: +0
i'll agree. And there is a chance your suffering form a bit of the "Taking the internet too seriously" influenza. But that doesn't make you wrong either.
FOR THE RECORD. That's why i don't do battles. It seems once you leave a comment on the song in the battle, you have nothing to say when it gets posted. At least for me.
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/22/2006 11:55:45 AM EST]
Score: +0
agreed, however, I don't feel like I've written everyone
off that gave a bad review. I'd like to think that I've
stated my thoughts about one worded and extremely
unuseful critiques, again, possibly to keep their
ton ten status. It is an unintelligent way of using
this forum. Nuff said.
singmetofire [11/22/2006 11:51:36 AM EST]
Score: +0
Well, i think it also has a lot to do with Genre favoring.
I myself am a fan of music with some energy in it. Mostly rock, hard rock type stuff. I like the heavy. Punk, metal, all that.
But some people here are into electronic.
Some are into Indy. Some are into alternative.

So, some people will get really good reviews and help on what can be changed/done different, sometimes it's garbo, and sometimes it's really insightful. But, i tend to use it (at least with my music) as kind of a learning platform in and of itself, even though it's insulting.

The thing that makes any musician "successful" is how well their music appeals to a vast audience, even though it may be of a certian "genre"

For instance: Fall out boy. (whom i #@&%!ing HATE)
The reason they are huge, is becuase all kinds of people love their music.
Hip hop fans, country bumpkins, the screamo kids, the tommy lee loving Moto X brofaces, They have fans in every walk of the generation no matter what they prefer by genre. SO, with that said, instead of writing EVERYONE off that gives you a bad review, mabye think "ok, what can i do, that will make this people like my #@&%!, even though its something they've NEVER been into"

Food for thought. I've had too much coffee.
Chapter 2. Comming Soon.
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/22/2006 11:45:09 AM EST]
Score: +0
singmetofire: a dictionary unicorn...?

Thanks for the indepth comment. very useful indeed.
I am always more interested in production critiques
vs. how many people 'like it.' I see a lot of that here
on myspace, unfortunately even from my own critiques,
but I think as critics we all need to focus on constructive
responses and thorough explanations instead of "sucks"
and "hated it." These types of smarmy self important critiques
will lose viewers and potential Redfizz members. If someone
recorded a song and put even the least bit of time to place
it on a critique forum, I'm sure they think it rocks or it is
great in someway, so these single worded critiques are
basically a waste of everyones' time. Possibly these "top
critics" are trying to keep their top ten Critic status active
by the shear number of (useless) critiquing. The age old
battle of quantity vs. quality. What a shame.
singmetofire [11/22/2006 11:29:26 AM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 3 stars
Right out of the gates the guitars sound good. Great tone.
The vocals sound a little TOO up front in the very beginning, and i think that note your hitting "i knooow" may be a little off. The part where you start getting into a higher range, it sounds like your a tad more comfterble, it sounds better.

The chorus is good too, you almost sound like the guy from Offspring.
I would say lose the "ni-e-ight" pronounciation, it kinda makes you sound like a sally. I think if you just kept the pronounciation of the words straight forward it would add to a "tuff" feeling you have going with this track.

Sounds like all the levels and tones are pretty good. Your definatly doing a lot more right than you are wrong. Yeah, your definatly more comfterble in that higher range. Id stay stick with that one a little more?

Good stuff, i think this may be the best track i've heard from you actually.
singmetofire [11/22/2006 11:26:50 AM EST]
Score: +0
Woah, i didn't know you had a dictionary unicorn too.
suckerpunch (song submitter) [11/22/2006 11:19:56 AM EST]
Score: +0
thanks fer the commentsl although "sucks" and/or "dumb" doesn't
really seem to help a person become un-sucky, buit I guess there
are people here just looking to un-frusterate themselves by being
curt and short in their 'critiques.' Alas the world needs ditch diggers
too (I say ditch diggers simply because the lack of eloquence
simply points toward their constructive natures).
drummerameye [11/22/2006 10:55:04 AM EST]
Score: +0
music good sound, vocals you have a better sounding voice that what you are displaying in this song, I think you do alot better aby changing your vocals, like the song by the way
unklesam [11/22/2006 8:14:28 AM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 3 stars
3 4 me

dumb is ok
chickadee [posted during evaluation]
Score: +0
sucks
TheBuyer [posted during evaluation]
Score: +0
i heart you, #@&%!head. this is dumb
ScottT [posted during evaluation]
Score: +0
whoa whoa whoa
qualcomm [posted during evaluation]
Score: +0
your voice. i don't like it.
an older song that I recently found
which I tracked at a studio and wasn't
pleased with the recorded tracks. Well,
I hooked up ye 'ole reliable Garageband
with some phat(?) guitar simulation and
this is what came out!


BLEEDER

I know
what you're thinking
what you're thinking tonight

and after your kisses
I feel fine
like after the daytime
comes the night
and after the moring
I feel fine
everything else
is black and white

you don't know
I am bleeding
and it's not right

and after your kisses
I feel fine
like after the daytime
comes the night
and after the moring
I feel fine
everything else
is black and white

I know
what you're feeling
you're feeling tonight

and after your kisses
I feel fine
like after the daytime
comes the night
and after the moring
I feel fine
everything else
is black and white