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12/8/2006

GHENGUS23 - sounds from Garageband 
Ithaca Dinosaurs
By GHENGUS23 
Genre: Rock
Rejection Reason: Battle Chicanery
Average Rating: [5 Votes, 2.5 Stars]
Views: 1,408
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Liner Notes
suckerpunch [12/10/2006 8:46:32 AM EST]
Score: +0
Yep Ithaca NY. My family and I lived there
for three years and 'they were the best of times,
they were the worst of times...'
aaronlife [12/8/2006 11:14:06 PM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 3 stars
ithaca ny? cool 90s song
The Taste [12/8/2006 7:12:05 PM EST]
Score: +0
ok, I think I know what it is: "Say Hello to Heaven" by Temple of the Dog
The Taste [12/8/2006 7:11:08 PM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 3 stars
This might impress me in a live setting. You get three stars for not making me listen to a socks-like creation.
unklesam [12/8/2006 1:36:40 PM EST]
Score: +0
thanks - was that so hard?
suckerpunch [12/8/2006 1:34:15 PM EST]
Score: +0
not sure if this song warrants dinosaur noises,
but I am definitely going to record my next
song with dinosaur noises AND japanese people
screaming!!!!
unklesam [12/8/2006 11:48:15 AM EST]
Score: +0
green day and nirvana's lovechild, nothing wrong with that
all in 3/4 timing, I'd change the progressions on the bridges and tighten it up a bit
you do a cool thing with the sustain on the vocals, but you hold a lot of notes, I think that gets a little old, I'd change that up a bit on the phrasing end of things
unklesam [12/8/2006 11:31:18 AM EST]
Score: +0
how about some dinosaur noises? maybe some godzilla roars and some overdubs of japanese people screaming?
ghengus23 (song submitter) [12/8/2006 11:28:45 AM EST]
Score: +0
goog thing
itchybrother [12/8/2006 11:27:05 AM EST]
Score: +0
guhbleshyou.
unklesam [12/8/2006 11:26:48 AM EST]
Score: +0
well its a good thing you love your 4track

I doubt anyone ever reads these comments,
but to those that do, this is an old favorite
4track recording of mine and I'm looking
to IMPROVE on it to bring it more up to
date as the original was recorded in the
late 90's. Just looking for some feedback
on any improvements you might think of
(excluding "start over!").
ghengus23 (song submitter) [12/8/2006 11:26:19 AM EST]
Score: +0
itchy::: not directed atchoo
ghengus23 (song submitter) [12/8/2006 11:25:20 AM EST]
Score: +0
Unckle::: still livin' in the past, tsk tsk
Mr. Bratty [12/8/2006 11:24:32 AM EST]
Score: +0
neil diamond is pretty sweet...
unklesam [12/8/2006 11:16:21 AM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 0.5 stars
you know its not grungey and its perfect and I love the guitar tones and the tone and the lyrics fit perfectly, I am offended by the very insinuation of the grunge word being brought to the attention of my good friends tune.

TOP pricks: let's band together and nominate this as a perfect example of a song that rocks and should be featured if we weren't all neil diamond soft rock loving has beens that couldnt tune an instrument or stay in beat to save our lives
itchybrother [12/8/2006 11:12:32 AM EST]
Score: +0
I actually think this song should be slower. You can leave the fuzzy guitars but take out the chug chug. Make it dark and smooth. Use Shine On You Crazy Diamond as a template for pace and mood.
itchybrother [12/8/2006 11:10:34 AM EST]
Score: +0
nawleans style.

chickory

good one, Bratty.
Mr. Bratty [12/8/2006 11:08:36 AM EST]
Score: +0
i thought chicanery was that stuff they put in the coffee to make it taste funny.
itchybrother [12/8/2006 11:07:41 AM EST]
Score: +0
not sure if directed at me, but, dude, i DID read the song info, first. What else should I be saying?
itchybrother [12/8/2006 11:06:20 AM EST]
Score: +0
aw, I'm just joshin Bratty. I've got nothing against brainstorming, per se...
ghengus23 (song submitter) [12/8/2006 11:04:16 AM EST]
Score: +0
again, new critics-

PLEASE read 'Song Info' so any more chicanery is eluded the listener.
itchybrother [12/8/2006 11:02:27 AM EST]
Score: +0
Nirvana! That's the song. The opening two chords to this are the same. Not that Nirvana owns them, but the effects on the guitar, plus your strum pattern, really make me think of that song.

But I do like the core of what you have here.
Mr. Bratty [12/8/2006 11:02:14 AM EST]
Score: +0
i don't know about that itchy. not as an absolute. i've done it both ways. what am i saying? all my songs are in the reject pile. i recuse myself.
Mr. Bratty [12/8/2006 11:00:05 AM EST]
Score: +0
"my mistake" by the king bees popped into my head while i was listening to this. but only because you said in the song info that you wanted to change it up or something.
itchybrother [12/8/2006 10:59:25 AM EST]
Score: +0
musicians brainstorm, songwriters don't!
ghengus23 (song submitter) [12/8/2006 10:58:31 AM EST]
Score: +0
musicians? who?! where?!
I'll kill em if I see 'em here!!!
Mr. Bratty [12/8/2006 10:56:55 AM EST]
Score: +0
hey, but i'm just throwin it out there, brainstorming. that's what musicians do, right?
Mr. Bratty [12/8/2006 10:55:39 AM EST]
Score: +0
i'm totally serious about it! make people do that dance they do when a hooky pop tune comes on. it's like aural heroin!
suckerpunch [12/8/2006 10:54:04 AM EST]
Score: +0
Itchy:::: yer thinking of that Nirvana tune... "he's the one/ who writes all our pretty song/ and he likes to beat his drum/ and he likes to sing along/ but he don't know what it means"

yeah, unfortunately the chicanery is present
Mr. Bratty [12/8/2006 10:53:30 AM EST]
Score: +0
ok, we'll keep the grungey guitar, but get it a better tone, mix it in deep with a doubled acoustic and a ricky 12.
itchybrother [12/8/2006 10:49:39 AM EST]
Score: +0
handclaps? Oh Bratty.

why does this have to be grunge just cause it has grungy guitar? Can grungy guitar never be used again?
suckerpunch [12/8/2006 10:45:42 AM EST]
Score: +0
MrBratty:::: you sarcastic focker. If I did all that, I'd be
Cold And Southern and I'd have a featured Redfizz hit!!!

hmm.... maybe not a bad plan. YES THAT"S IT! TODAY
POP 90'S GRUNGE, TOMORROW SOFT AND SENTIMENTAL
ROCK FOR THE MASSES TO DIGEST EASIER!!!! AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!
Mr. Bratty [12/8/2006 10:36:20 AM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 3 stars
dude, i'd take this and drop all the grungeyness, clean it up, bring up the the tempo and make a pop tune out of it. de-heavy it and make it light and fluffy. handclaps, snappy backing vocals, hooky chorus. make it fun instead of bludgeon theatre.
itchybrother [12/8/2006 10:34:39 AM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 3 stars
this reminds me of something, I can't think what. The opening chords are really familiar.

What's weird is I also hear in the opening chords a trace of Pink Floyd's "Shine On You Crazy Diamond".

I like your voice. I kinda like this.
ghengus23 (song submitter) [12/8/2006 10:05:39 AM EST]
Score: +0
PLEASE read 'Song Info' so any more chicanery is eluded the listener.
renton [posted during evaluation]
Score: +0
shh, nobody tell them but i think grunge is dead.
heavymetalairplane [posted during evaluation]
Score: +0
The intro had me anticipating a move in of two directions-- closer to Marcy Playground or closer to Fuel. I guess you went the latter route and threw in some Andrew McMahon.
unklesam [posted during evaluation]
Score: +0
asdfadfasdfas
I doubt anyone ever reads these comments,
but to those that do, this is an old favorite
4track recording of mine and I'm looking
to IMPROVE on it to bring it more up to
date as the original was recorded in the
late 90's. Just looking for some feedback
on any improvements you might think of
(excluding "start over!").


Ithaca Dinosaurs

All that you give me
is left to the sea
All that you leave me
has drowned within me

Now I'm wandering
is there anywhere to sleep
Now I am finding
It's all up to me

Stickered and stretchered
the pocketbook spree
So good in due time
the Manderin fee

Now I'll feeling
there is everywhere to sleep
how we are laughing
in what we believe

Twisted and tethered
a blind man sings
Wasted and blistered
by too many things

And he is drowning
in what he believes
He is surrounding
everything he sees
He is demanding
the world gives his way
He's not understanding
time slips away