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1/24/2007

A Few Moments Later -  
Apocalypse Now
Genre: Power Pop
Weighted Rating: [9 Votes, 1.6 Stars]
Views: 1,729
Featured Review
qualcomm [posted during evaluation]
Score: +19
i think this is quite horrible, but it has just enough points to make second stage, so...
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Liner Notes
DeadraveN [6/2/2007 12:26:12 PM EST]
Score: +0
Just browsing the site, revisiting things I'd commented on before, and damn, I'm glad I did, if only to hear/see the term "voltronically" coined by cobainsaxsolo... I'm so stealing that...

as for the song... Still too cheesy for my tastes, but I do find myself wondering what else the band has to offer..
MeatMachineII [2/19/2007 12:21:41 PM EST]
Score: +0
Man, i wish i remembered the lyrics, truthfully, the cd was in arms reach in the rack, i just pulled them from the sleeve. I know the jist, but sadly i didnt measure up.
GoingtothePoolhouse [2/19/2007 12:18:33 AM EST]
Score: +0
I love that Dio song! Good job remembering the lyrics.
MeatMachineII [2/19/2007 12:13:35 AM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 0.5 stars
Dude, the problem you have is that you aren't that great, you think you are, but simply aren't. You're doing ok, but stop speaking, and writing your songs with a thesaurus.

This idea you have of the mainstream is WEAK. Noone here loves the mainstream flow. Everyone heres knows a bit about music. You can write about LOVE, and breaking up with your girlfriend, without being a tool.

However, you can't write this song without being corny. Its proposterous. What are you thinking?

There was a band. The name of the band is DIO. They are the line between badass and cheesy. Please refer to them from now on to find out if your song is cheesy. If Dio sounds more badass than your crazy fantasy lyrics, please abort the song.


Heres an example


Your Lyrics:

The time is right, for the storm - again.
Hopeless as an Oak, in the fall.
Looking left, I notice ME.
Looking right, I see nothing at all...


Dio Lyrics:

Don't talk to strangers 'cause they're only there to do you harm
Don't write in starlight 'cause the words may come out real
Don't hide in doorways you may find the key that opens up your soul
Don't go to heaven 'cause it's really only hell
Don't smell the flowers they're an evil drug to make you loose your mind
Don't dream of women 'cause they'll only bring you down


Man, reading that hurts. Listen, as soon as your lyrics are sweeter than those dio lyrics, then you can say your better than someone. And it will only be Dio, which still won't get you featured.


Usually Im such a nice guy, but you drove me to this flame.
MykeLExneR [1/25/2007 12:15:52 AM EST]
Score: +0
that comment was actully meant to be said on this account...paranoidliar mykelexner ...i forgot...sorry...
paranoidliar [1/25/2007 12:11:50 AM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 0.5 stars
From what ive heard here and read on the comments...it seems clear
an overdeveloped ego on an underdeveloped artist
much like me...
I mean...come on...you end it with a loud explosion...

Outdated look and sound
zissou [1/24/2007 11:57:04 PM EST]
Score: +0
Ouch. As the great thinker, Ed Grimley once said..."that's a pain that's gonna linger".
blasto [1/24/2007 11:19:56 PM EST]
Score: +0
Cobain! Nice to see you back in all yer glory. Stick around- I'm sure I'm not the only one that misses your wheelchair-bound lesbian comments!
Cobainsaxsolo [1/24/2007 10:54:23 PM EST]
Score: +11
Rated 0.5 stars
This song is bad. But that is not enough. Many songs are bad around here and on the radio and all over the damn place. But there's something special going on here.

It's not just that the girl is ugly, it's that despite her ugliness she tarts her self up in wet lipstick, a short, tight skirts, and transparent Taylor Rain porno pumps, stumblebumbling around in a sad pantomime of eroticism. Instead of knowing her doomed lot in life and quietly brooding in self loathing in a dark corner this ugly girl wants to draw as much attention to herself as possible so she can argue with every reasonable fellow who happens by and says, "Run along dear."

It's so exquisitely bad it has forced me out of my redfizz retirement. These lyrics are so god damned wonderfully lame I keep expecting that "gotcha moment" when some idiot from the E channel jumps out to say we are all on a new reality TV show in which people are tricked and whatnot. It hits all its marks. Right from the distant thunder introduction to the invocation of the Styx River. A symmetry of cheesey cliches forming Voltronically into a musical bromide larger than its parts.
ScottT [1/24/2007 9:54:10 PM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 2 stars
reasonably competent, but predictible
blasto [1/24/2007 5:00:25 PM EST]
Score: +0
I forgot....

:)

-and

wow.
blasto [1/24/2007 4:58:47 PM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 1 star
There is no personality here. Although your lyrics strain to evoke introspective and intellectual ideas (see: any high school boy's journal), this comes across as a forgettable track from a karaoke sampler CD. Quite sterile and "scripted". As if you aren't yet comfortable enough with your instruments to experiment, or try something off the beaten path.

afml- if you aren't so defensively smug with your comments, people may be a bit more receptive & willing to respect your work here.

Also, did it REALLY take 7 people to make this?
singmetofire [1/24/2007 3:32:58 PM EST]
Score: +0
Spot on Willabe. Nicely put.
WILLBMUSIC [1/24/2007 3:28:42 PM EST]
Score: +10
a decent offering, but ifeel you have 2 seperate works going on here. I think a different break would bolster the song by keeping with the accoustic feel and dark political tone. The current chorus seems "spinal tap'sih" and out of place in what could be a very good acoustic piece. also i think the genre should be accoustic rock, rather than power pop.
good luck.
meatball [1/24/2007 3:11:00 PM EST]
Score: +0
"OH MAN! YOU DONT LIKE MY BAND, THAT MEANS YOU HAVE HORRIBLE TASTE IN MUSIC"

That, however, not so much a quote. Just my best shot at an impression.

MOVING ON
meatball [1/24/2007 3:10:19 PM EST]
Score: +0
Ah yes. All knowing you are.

My point, you are missing.
Im not being nasty, or hurtling insults. The botton line is, you will never be as cool, as you think you are, and that's what ruins this track for me. Well, that and the fact that it seems it's plucked right out of a conan comic book.


Salvidor Dali?
...ok.



I find this humourous actually.
Here are some of your quotes:

"Hear something you don't like? Start hurtling insults."

Said after this....

" would have to say we are head and shoulders above most. :) Perhaps the production isn't the greatest, but the heart, sentiment and raw talent outstrip the rest. You're entitled to your opinions, of course. Just as I am entitled to point out how your posts reflect your lack of actual musical knowledge, talent and taste. Your comments have reduced you in point, to the stature of American Idol judges, who know NOTHING about what real music is, and instead focus on how to market garbage. Have a nice day! :) "

No one, will ever be as cool as you, to you.
afml_studios (song submitter) [1/24/2007 2:58:02 PM EST]
Score: -2
lol. Nice. Posts like this one are what clue people in to the children they are dealing with. Hear something you don't like? Start hurtling insults.

Did I say they sucked? No.

My alligator mouth has teeth. :) *shrugs* We all call them as we see them, no? The more nasty you get, the more I will politely point out that your infantile manner is reflected in the music you find appealing.

My canary ass just deposited some droppings on you. Better wipe them off.

Peace! :)

Infomercial logo?!?! rofl! Sorry for not posting a bad salvador dali ripoff as your boys seem to favour.

That's not right. I apologize for that last one. But their artwork is disturbing.
meatball [1/24/2007 2:39:10 PM EST]
Score: +0
I'd like to point out how much i really really love the informertial picture logo.

I really don't have a vast universe of feedback that i could give to captian "i already knew that anyway" Except, if your going to sit back and attempt to pull off such a wonderous know it all attitude, and even attempt to claim your band is worth a fuss more than dredg, well, frankly, you've got to make way better music than what i hear with this track.

Basically, your alligator mouth is pretty much outrunning your canary ass.

ps. Endless ocean of entropy.
afml_studios (song submitter) [1/24/2007 2:37:03 PM EST]
Score: -2
Sparta - Indeed, more than a few cuts above the pablum. Some nice instrumental work going on.

Dredg - Interesting lyrics. Instrumentally, just another rhythm driven group. *shrugs* Not bad, certainly. But worth the fuss? eh.

:) I have paid attention. Again, you are quoting exceptions, rather than rules, here. For every 1 decent band you can name, there are 10 with contracts that suck b*lls.

mafia ties? whoah.
unklesam [1/24/2007 2:31:01 PM EST]
Score: +0
ohh no! here comes meatball- I thought you were moved away in witness protection due to the mafia ties you have and banned from Redfizz permanently. Crap! what say you to the qualities of AFML?
meatball [1/24/2007 2:29:20 PM EST]
Score: +0
Well mabye you should spend more time paying attention to the things you claim to have all figured out. Not all bands are blink182 and My Chemical Romance, They are just what you choose to b ase you assumptions off of becuase your too lazy to actually look into whats really going on beyond MTV.
afml_studios (song submitter) [1/24/2007 2:10:46 PM EST]
Score: -2
Thanks. I will do so. There are certainly exceptions to every rule. I was speaking in a general sense.
meatball [1/24/2007 2:04:37 PM EST]
Score: +0
Go listen to Dredg, or Sparta. You tell me what about that is "adolescant" lyricaly.
afml_studios (song submitter) [1/24/2007 1:56:32 PM EST]
Score: -2
LOL! Now that's some funny stuff. :) The video we never got to film WOULD have included Valkyrie.... and warriors from every period in history. Basically the song is saying we make the same mistakes ad infinitum and we never seem to learn.

As for worrying about the the words, we have to. Rock today says little besides adolescent, purile, angst. *yawn* We took the less travelled road. Tho it might not appeal to mainstream tatse, neither does Jack Black. He's doing okay regardless.

I appreciate the honest and thoughtful opinions. :) Thanks very much.
unklesam [1/24/2007 1:36:53 PM EST]
Score: +0
I'll be honest now: you've got some good things going and some nice sounds. I like the vocals and the sound really for the most part and the songwriting is original.

Cheese is so last year though, cut down on the lightning and dont worry so much about the words. Well maybe get out an eraser and rework them a little and you'll be doing great!

nice git solo too, but less cheese there as well ah-do believe
singmetofire [1/24/2007 1:33:07 PM EST]
Score: +0
Yes indeed, PLEASE submit another, Until then unk and i wait for safe passage to valhalla.
unklesam [1/24/2007 1:31:00 PM EST]
Score: +0
best lyrics for amateur Redfizz tune goes to....

all that's really missing is the viking helmet and nordic rage and you've got yourself a bavarian polka death dirge soundtrack ready for WOW or secondlife

please submit another song Apocalypse Now! this is fun
singmetofire [1/24/2007 1:26:42 PM EST]
Score: +0
Unk, i fancied these ones myself....

"The Demi-gods got their wish at last;
Peace broke out in an Ion Blast.
What is left for their ugly rule,
but shattered homes and empty schools.. "
unklesam [1/24/2007 1:17:42 PM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 2 stars
unklesam [1/24/2007 1:17:27 PM EST]
Score: +0
how can the following not fit right into a tenacious d song?

Must we always fight for freedom?
Can we sleep, without the Peace of War?
Is there no one left among us
Who'll take the stone and beat the sword?

I mean do war and sword really rhyme? Hmmm- ok I'm done
singmetofire [1/24/2007 12:54:08 PM EST]
Score: +0
And, Raven and I left retarded ones?
I'm having a very hard time understanding your point of view here.

Also, let me clear this up for you....
If the comment says "posted during evaluation" there's a reason they didn't say a whole lot, it's left in the "Battle" section of the page, which has no stars to rate, just to leave an initial comment on the song you've just heard. Then, once it gets through that part, and publishes to its respective page, usualy is the point where we will leave more in depth comments/critiques of the songs.
afml_studios (song submitter) [1/24/2007 12:50:54 PM EST]
Score: -2
THANK you. Now THAT is educated criticism.

Most appreciated Mr. ithchybrother!
itchybrother [1/24/2007 12:46:26 PM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 2 stars
y'all sound like competent musicians. But the song comes across a bit like a Spinal Tap song. Especially the section of the chorus where you sing, "we'll take the stone and beat the sword". And then repeat it, like I didn't get it the first time. I'm waiting for the druids to drop in. The lyrics are obviously well thought out and something you believe in, but unfortunately it comes across as hokey in this format, followed by slap bass and and lengthy wah solo. The music reminds me a lot of the band Dada, who I like, but who I also feel has a tendency toward hokey-ness, probably because you know they are being so serious.
afml_studios (song submitter) [1/24/2007 12:31:03 PM EST]
Score: -2
Okay then; PROGRESSIVE power pop. :)

I just went and listened to singmetofire. Not my style, but seems a good representation of rock music today.
singmetofire [1/24/2007 12:25:45 PM EST]
Score: +9
"Power Pop"


Wow.
afml_studios (song submitter) [1/24/2007 12:20:29 PM EST]
Score: -12
Firstly, please quote correctly; I said head and shoulders above most. NOT rest. I give props where they're due. There are people on here BETTER than us. Just, not many.
As for my responses to mr. qualcomm and mr. bratty, they seemed to take it well enough. Since when is one not allowed to defend their own musical efforts?? I appreciate educated critiques. I don't appreciate nasty comments with no supporting explanation. Going to rate me poorly? Fine. Give me something to work with, not just "i think this is quite horrible" or "the words are kinda bad." If you do pointless criticism, I cannot do pointed rebuttal.

Wow.
singmetofire [1/24/2007 12:11:26 PM EST]
Score: +0
haha yeah, i dug that too. Like, he's being a smartass, but only as a refrence.
itchybrother [1/24/2007 12:10:37 PM EST]
Score: +0
I liked how QC smiled inside quotation marks.
singmetofire [1/24/2007 12:06:46 PM EST]
Score: +0
NevardaeD, imna have to agree with you there. The part about my band or whatever, well that is up to the listener, but moreso in agreance with the fact that after reading his comment to QC and Bratty, i was left with a little bit of a bad taste in my mouth also.
DeadraveN [1/24/2007 12:04:24 PM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 2.5 stars
tried really hard not to let your "we're head and shoulders above the rest" comment influence my listening... but I do hate overconfident artists you've got some talent, I'll give you that, but I've definately heard more talented artists here.. Hell, I don't even like singme's music, but I'd consider him a better singer, and his band more talented, and that's just one example... not knocking you too much here, just a reality check.. anyway, off my soapbox and onto the song..

I usually like music with a message, but this does come off a bit too strong with the "demigods" and "river styx" talk.. and the vocal inflection feels forced, which I found distracting...
so yeah, you get some stars for musician-ship and for passion, but the cheese-factor knocks the rating down a bit... I'll go middle of the road.. 2.5
singmetofire [1/24/2007 11:54:57 AM EST]
Score: +0
Rated 2 stars
Ok well, after listening to this a couple times, i have to say. This isn't necessarily a BAD song, the lyrics are pretty cheesy. Ion Blast?
Anyhow, the levels seem pretty decent here, this isn't at all my style, it reminds me of Tenacious D, or the Team America theme. I think the drum tones are pretty dry here, same with the guitar, im not too keen on all the production values, vocals seem pretty clean, you hit all your notes correctly. This is just kind of boring for me, neat message, tight performance overall, cheesy lyrics.
Not the best, not the worst. This song is just kinda, there.
afml_studios (song submitter) [1/24/2007 11:52:19 AM EST]
Score: -2
unklesam - The tone is supposed to be dark. If it makes one feel uneasy, that's because it's SUPPOSED to make one think. :) As for the lyrics being bad, I really have to question that part of the comment. *coughing* Again, you are certainly entitled to your opinion, but, anyone with a decent high school education will get the psychological references. If one doesn't, time to do some reading on the classics. :)
Singmetofire and fffforever - Hrm. going to have to listen to that theme. They probably stole it from us.... ;)
FFFForever [1/24/2007 11:51:54 AM EST]
Score: +0
America!................................#@&%! Yeah!
singmetofire [1/24/2007 11:50:21 AM EST]
Score: +0
Dude i was just about to say that, hahahaha
FFFForever [1/24/2007 11:49:40 AM EST]
Score: +0
The chorus reminds me of the theme song from Team America.
singmetofire [1/24/2007 11:44:56 AM EST]
Score: +0
*Much love to Nova*
10 second rule. Direct input acoustic guitar sounds like poop.
unklesam [1/24/2007 11:39:47 AM EST]
Score: +0
actually the words are kinda bad- I wouldnt normally pan you for that but this song just feels awkward and uneasy

the tones are opressive too
afml_studios (song submitter) [1/24/2007 11:10:19 AM EST]
Score: -2
Thank you Mr. Bratty. Most appreciated. Mr. qualcomm, looking at my lyrics, I think most people will stand by my first comment in your case. :)
qualcomm [1/24/2007 10:22:26 AM EST]
Score: +0
i was mainly responding to your self-evidently horrible lyrics. ":-)"
Mr. Bratty [1/24/2007 10:10:11 AM EST]
Score: +0
That's the spirit! Musicians with less heart shouldn't even be allowed on stage, in my opinion.
afml_studios (song submitter) [1/24/2007 10:02:55 AM EST]
Score: -12
LOL! I give you all points for your interesting comments, that have NOTHING to do with this song. :) As for it being horrible, mr. qualcomm, I take it with a grain of salt, since you give no reason for your rating. And Mr. Bratty, sorry about your wife. But letting your poor experience with her influence your outlook on life and music, does neither you NOR the music you review any true justice. Sorry to disagree with your opinions, but, after having listened to quite a bit of the music presented on the site, I would have to say we are head and shoulders above most. :) Perhaps the production isn't the greatest, but the heart, sentiment and raw talent outstrip the rest. You're entitled to your opinions, of course. Just as I am entitled to point out how your posts reflect your lack of actual musical knowledge, talent and taste. Your comments have reduced you in point, to the stature of American Idol judges, who know NOTHING about what real music is, and instead focus on how to market garbage. Have a nice day! :)
unklesam [1/24/2007 8:36:27 AM EST]
Score: +0
wow I give Mr. Bratty more points for his remarks than the song gets
Mr. Bratty [posted during evaluation]
Score: +9
this isn't bad, but it made me feel bad. and my ex-wife taught me that feelings are more important than truth. like, she said i made her feel like i was cheating on her (which in reality i wasn't) and so she treated me as though i actually was cheating on her. which was a drag because she called my family and told them what a rotten guy i am and when they said she was crazy she cursed at them and wished death on them and... well, you get the picture.
The time is right, for the storm - again.
Hopeless as an Oak, in the fall.
Looking left, I notice ME.
Looking right, I see nothing at all...

Stomach's like, a tourniquette.
I hear babies cries, and distant guns.
The River Styx flows cold this night;
and Charron's damned ship, always runs...

Chorus:

Must we always fight for freedom?
Can we sleep, without the Peace of War?
Is there no one left among us
Who'll take the stone and beat the sword?

The Demi-gods got their wish at last;
Peace broke out in an Ion Blast.
What is left for their ugly rule,
but shattered homes and empty schools..

Chorus

It happens over, and over again.
Bitter enemies are the BEST of friends...
No consciousness and no remorse;
They split the spoils in the end, of course...

Chorus